Hey Chelsea - I love your personality that shines here. Seeing you correct yourself was so "human" and realistic, and it works to keep it in (rather than start over to be "perfect"). I might adjust the fourth wall to be a question rather than assumption of knowing what a "monstaria" (sorry, I don't know if I spelled it correctly) - asking if they know what it is - is more inviting to the viewer IMO. For me, I don't know what it is - while I love plants, I am more of a succulent person because of my busy lifestyle. So when I heard it mentioned and assumed that I should know what it is because it's pretty common, it was a tad off-putting and took me away from your story a bit because my reaction was - "actually, no, I don't know what it is..." Other than that, it was a really nice story.
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Hey Chelsea - I love your personality that shines here. Seeing you correct yourself was so "human" and realistic, and it works to keep it in (rather than start over to be "perfect"). I might adjust the fourth wall to be a question rather than assumption of knowing what a "monstaria" (sorry, I don't know if I spelled it correctly) - asking if they know what it is - is more inviting to the viewer IMO. For me, I don't know what it is - while I love plants, I am more of a succulent person because of my busy lifestyle. So when I heard it mentioned and assumed that I should know what it is because it's pretty common, it was a tad off-putting and took me away from your story a bit because my reaction was - "actually, no, I don't know what it is..." Other than that, it was a really nice story.